Last minute changes ... !

After our rough cut thriller was viewed by our teacher we realised that some aspects of our thriller needed to be changed so that the quality overall would be better . One of the points our teacher made was that the plot didn't make sense , he suggested that we film another scene .

Plot (Before) : Theres this main girl who get's bullied by other pupils at her school constantly , she get's to a point were she can't take it no more so she runs away to the forest , commits suicide and comes back as a Onryo Ghost . We have a jack in the box which she winds up to suggest how what the bullying is doing to her . When she turns into the ghost she goes about killing all the people who bullied her at school.

Dan our media teacher said he didn't get the plot from looking at our rough cut edit therefor we realised that we had to change our plot to something less complex and film another bullying scene to make our plot more clear.


We decided that we weren't going to film a suicide scene as it's only our beginning however after we filmed another bullying scene he commented saying "Now i can tell that she gets bullied and that's what turns her into that ghost"